Dammit i’m mad

I ‘m exhausted

in mind and body

( it really shouldn’t be this hard)

our “love” affair

has grown shoddy

I’ve lost the will to fight

that I once had

BUT

Dammit I’m Mad

¤

~Melanie Blackwell

A work of fiction written for Trifecta writing prompt, see below.

This week’s challenge: You’ve got exactly 33 words and one of them must be a palindrome. ( It’s a word or phrase that reads the same forwards and backwards)

40 Comments

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40 responses to “Dammit i’m mad

  1. shailajav

    Juxtaposing love and the effort that goes into it. Beautiful!

  2. True love shouldn’t be that hard, but often it is.

    Great use of the prompt

    Ally

    @allyatherton

  3. Excellent, as long as it’s not true:) “…I’ve lost the will to fight” that says so much. Strong words. “…it shouldn’t be this hard.” It should be hard at all…love is easy, life is hard. Great poem Melanie.

  4. I think the last line is not only an excellent palindrome, but a perfect sum of the piece.

  5. sometimes one has to have the courage to break one’s own heart!

  6. Lovely palindrome and excellent post, overall. If this is to be the final Trifecta post of yours that I am to read then, it has all ended on a high note, indeed. Thanks for sharing your excellent work. Best of luck in life and, with writing, in the world beyond Trifecta. 🙂

  7. Miranda Stone

    I love this one! I think the rhythm of the poem, and of course the ending packs a punch. Well done, Melanie!

  8. Miranda Stone

    I meant, “I *like* the rhythm of the poem.” Sigh.

  9. KymmInBarcelona

    Love the blend of palindrome and text. Glad I’m not at the other end : )

  10. This is so true! And sometimes that final emotion is anger. I like the punch at the end because it makes that point! Well done with this one!

  11. Was hopin’ somebody would use this one, too!
    Well done!

  12. Where there’s anger, there’s passion, of some sort anyhow. It’s maybe better than indifference. Great little poem!

  13. TNT

    Anger beats out reason nine times out of ten. You capture that essence well. The love affair in the middle is the cherry on top. You’ll pulled off an excellent punch to the poem, all while using a palindrome, that is skill. Nice work! My favorite part of this piece is your grammatical choices.

  14. This has a great voice and wonderful flow. Delightful. Thanks for linking up!

  15. This was a great read. It bade me to consider how we can spend our lives battling our emotions. We must decide if it is worth it or not, on a case by case basis.

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