November 7, 2013 · 8:17 PM
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Return ~Sedoka

he will return soon

breathlessly she is waiting

mother and son reunion

—

no longer a boy

youth beaten to submission

war scarred soldier returns home

~Melanie Blackwell

The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following syllable counts:5/7/7, 5/7/7. A Sedoka, pair of katauta as a single poem, may address the same subject from differing perspectives.

A katauta is an unrhymed three-line poem the following syllable counts: 5/7/7.

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14 responses to “Return ~Sedoka”

  1. Skye @ TheSanctuaryofMyHeart
    November 7, 2013 at 8:47 PM

    Very nice!!! 🙂 Thanks for teaching me something new. You did a great job!

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  3. hitandrun1964
    November 7, 2013 at 9:56 PM

    Both sides. Mother waiting for a boy who is no longer there. The boy, who is no long there, coming home to meet a mother who only knew him as a boy. They will begin again. Nice poem. Really like it:)

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  4. nokindofmagic
    November 8, 2013 at 4:42 PM

    As someone with the history of mother/son issues I must say it’s a gem, Melanie. Despite the engineering part (yup, whenever I see numbers. I flee in panic).

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  5. Mélanie
    November 9, 2013 at 10:17 AM

    impressive and emotional…
    – – –
    I’m a Mel B, too… 🙂

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  6. leooras
    November 15, 2013 at 5:39 PM

    Memorable poem! Today, in the peaceful Sweden we also know the horrors of war when our children come home from peacekeeping mission in Afghanistan. A sad beautiful and great poem!

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  7. greenlightlady
    November 16, 2013 at 10:36 PM

    This is a deeply moving Sedoka, Melanie. So true and so sad for so many.

    Blessings ~ Wendy

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